You Sir, are a lyricist. Nicely done on the song.

I'd love to hear you sing something rather than just spoken word.

Regarding the mix.... backing tracks are good.

Since the lyrics are the star and focal point of this work.....they should be easier to hear and understand. I think if you were to roll off the mids and lower frequencies a bit to allow the spoken word to be more easily heard without the mud on the lower freqs, they will sit on and in the mix a bit more clearly.

Just my 2 cents

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