Hi Rick ...

OK, first to first address the issues you brought up:

For my ears, it's already finished. It's a lovely lyric that eloquently but simply unfolds the message. The music, as it is, is much the same and I think it fits. If it were me, I wouldn't touch the arrangement.

Just a couple of things for your consideration:

I think the drums are a wee bit loud as they bring in the lead guitar. They're a bit disrupting to the simple serenity. I'm fine with the short breaks before and after the lead.

I think a little less reverb on the vocal would soften the vocal without making it mushy. I wouldn't bring it down much ... just a tad.

All in all, I like the song a lot. As I mentioned, the lyric is lovely without being sappy. It's a strong message that you deliver with subtle tenderness.

I like it as is, other than the two things I mentioned. And those two things certainly aren't deal breakers. I just think they would add a bit of extra polish to a work that already shines.

These are only my opinions for your consideration. Ignore them if they don't complement your idea for this song's presentation. Otherwise, feel free to use them as you see fit.

Very nice song!

Alan

Last edited by Al-David; 08/01/22 12:08 PM.
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