Update:

I finally found some time to work on this song again, and I did a couple of changes:
  • changed the grammar and clunky phrasing, special thanks to rayc. I hope I did not create new problems blush
  • made the drums a couple of dB louder
  • made the vocals (slightly) less loud

I didn't change the structure of the song, whatever I tried (bridge, pre-chorus, rhythmic variations, more dynamics in the chorus) changed the song in a direction I liked less.

I've created a Soundcloud account for this project, so if you're not yet tired of listening to this song: https://soundcloud.com/eleanorlennox/city-punk-blues

Changed lyrics:

Walking down the city
really bored and looking sh*tty
after too many drinks

Waiting for the city
to wake up and to look pretty
having too many drinks
[...]
Do what you want
I don't listen anymore
You're a f*cking waste of time
someone I'll better try to ignore
to ignore, to ignore, to ignore, to ignore

Thanks again for all the feedback I got from you all, you guys'n'girls rock. I really appreciate that!

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