I heard this on the SynthesizerV forum - really nicely done. Love the vocals and backing tracks.

Catchy pop - I like it! laugh

As you point out, the lyric is problematic - especially because it's the hook, which is where all the attention goes.

It makes sense, but it's klunky.

One of the things I like about working with SynthV - it's trivial to modify the vocal, save the audio file, load the DAW and re-render the song. So you can go through lots of iterations on the lyrics and test them out. I've actually done that a number of times with songs I've posted - even after posting them.

I think the best approach would be to drop the lyric and go with something else that has the same sort of idea, but a different rhyme that doesn't box you in a corner.

Or just chalk it up to "live and learn" and move on to the next song. wink

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?