Nice progression.
insightful lyrics.
The vocals not bad at all.
The mix, with the drums leaning right, is odd.
I can hear why you'd want it that way given the stereo piano has most of its action on the left.
I'd be inclined to set the piano as mono, pan it right or left and introduce something gentle opposite it while plonking the drums in the centre.
This is partially because the piano is busy and sometimes steps on your vocal melody.
The chorus "fissure" could use some variation each time it appears.
Nice work.


Cheers
rayc
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