Great job. I'm no good at the production aspect, so I won't even try to venture there. However: I really enjoyed the song.

1) Lyrics: the theme of the song and its execution are wonderful. I love the "dark" nature of it. Quotation marks because it's not that dark, to me ... it's a compassionate look at the downtrodden, as I see it.

2) I really like the shift between minor, for the verses, and the major for the chorus. The repetition of "paint your eyes" at the end really works, I think.

3) You really are excellent at song structure. You know how to tell a story that has an impeccable structure to it, and it therefore carries so much better, to the listener, than something which would be less organised. In my view, of course.

In the same vein: you have excellent technical (music theory, as it were) control over everything you do when you write - and, as I said, I think you're extremely organised with it, too. It all really helps to deliver a proper "end product", as it were (I hate that kind of "marketing language", i.e. "end product", but that's neither here nor there).

Ok, onto a second listen.

I'll just add this. I never quite get the depth of your songs, to my full capacity, on a first listen. It takes me a couple of listens at least, to truly appreciate. That's a good thing :-)

The brief guitar solo is Queen-esque.

Well done. Your usual high standard, in a somehow (and somewhat) different cloak and form, as you say. Leaves me wanting more.

Last edited by musician17; 08/28/22 10:10 PM.
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