Thank you, Deej.

I listen to all criticisms, because they come from somewhere and they are often something I missed.

Here's how I think about the "chorus" ... it is supposed to be somewhat jarring, as basically it mirrors the sudden discontinuity in our lives we feel when we get such news, and we have a stream of lyrics in the verses and then this sudden almost non-sequitur single word interrupt it so the listener almost has to think, "wait, what??" How does that fit in?

Kind of like what we're having to do to process this information in the short amount of time we've had to process it. Now mind you, I didn't consciously come up with this, but looking back I subconsciously did. In that I did it because it just felt right and then I had to go back and ask myself WHY it felt right.

That all being said, I do listen to the criticisms and I did go back and listen for what you might be talking about. It is supposed to be jarring, but we don't want it to be SO jarring that it is no longer something you want to listen to. And I think the first occurrence of the word is fine. The second one should probably fade more, sooner. By the time we get to the end, I'm not sure yet. It is also supposed to be almost somewhat of a "cry". A lament.

So thanks, I will probably go back and play a little more with it.

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