Originally Posted By: Ghostgum
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Where do I begin?


This song tells me you've already begun and, if it doesn't win her over, then maybe nothing will.

Instrument choice, arrangement, melody, lyrics, production - all top notch.:)

Thanks, Brian. Yes, I know a couple who started out as friends until one of them tried breaking the barrier. They just celebrated their 50th wedding anniversary.

Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
That's a different take on the old love theme.

I'm sure it's a sentiment that has been felt by many but not so commonly expressed in a song. Excellent.

It's all there man, the already mentioned write, the melody, bass and vocals ... and of course the mix.

As others have mentioned the sax is great. I've spent time trying to comp up a sax solo but not with this result.

And, last but assuredly not least the video imagery was perfecto for the lyric.

Nice!

J&B


Thanks, Janice & Bud. Yeah, it seems I leaned on an old songwriter's crutch for this one: make it something everyone can relate to even if they pretend they can't. Man, I've learned so much from you, it's really cool to read your comments.

Originally Posted By: Greg Johnson
Very pretty song Marty!!! Different for you....a mellow ballad, which you also sing very well!! I know what you mean about the saxes........some of them sound very different on different phrases. Sax is complicated......I think it is the most complex instrument to the human voice. Really cool song!!! Take care. Greg

Thanks so much, Greg. You mean a lot to me.

Originally Posted By: Deej56
Marty,

Engaging tune with a rich vocal turn, hitting on the right notes of sadness and longing. Good write and stellar mix. Solos in BIAB are always a tricky thing—sometimes they work just great on the first stand . . . and other times you have to labor over them. I absolutely love how you slow down the tempo at the end of that solo—a brilliant touch!

Hope all is well in your world,

Deej

Thanks for noticing the emotions, Deej. Yes, there are many times when BiaB soloists work perfectly on the first go. Sometimes the key and the chord progression works perfectly, and other times not so much. But that's the same in real life. wink

Originally Posted By: musician17
In my humble opinion, your best so far. And that's even before the slowed down section, which - for me - takes it up a notch, even more. And the video is beautiful. You are a real sensitive musician, and - from our brief conversations between one song comment and another - a great human being. Both show in this song, and how. Bravo - keep going.

P.S. about the "better singer" comment ... it's true, neither of us are Freddie Mercury or anything. BUT: the emotion with which you sing is yours and yours alone. I've often thought of delegating singing duty to others, in my own songs, whenever there's a need for an actually sung melody. But: no. If I did that, the whole emotionally charged, authentic atmosphere would dissipate immediately, I feel. Same with you ... you sing and sing well, and comfortably well enough to communicate what you want, in the way you want it in. So ... please sing and don't worry :-) Thanks for sharing this with us :-)

Hello, James. Thanks so much, my friend. You mean a lot to me. Strange, huh? I sing along with almost all of your songs and I see another new one where I'm headed next.

Enjoy whatever happens!
marty

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