Excellent write - clear and easy to hear.

You've got a nice conversational style here. I'm not fond of the line "married to stay" because - unlike the rest of what your wrote - it doesn't sound like what someone would say. But I don't know the folks that you know. wink

Although the song is personal, it works well without having to know the back story.

I think it's fine as-is. Not necessarily "commercial", but certainly a good song.


-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?