Hi Jim,

What a difference from your first effort.
I feel it has come alive.

There are a couple of things that I will comment on (I don't usually comment - as I am not that proficient myself )

In the line :
Quote:

And the fire will blaze and shine day and night
The sky is the limit as we fly high as a kite



I thought if you changed to this it would help you.

And the fire will blaze and shine day and night
The sky is the limit we fly high as a kite

The last verse is a little off time with your vocal (at the beginning)

Please don't take offense as I am only trying to be helpful.

Best regards
Michee


Windows 11 64 bit, Biab 2024 1111, Realband 2024
i7 Desktop Computer 16Gb Memory