Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
Terrific work again with the synth voices and the video! I thought the choruses were perfect but there were a few (very few) stilted lines in the verses. I guess I am getting demanding now that you've become so good with the synth voices. I'll bet the average person wouldn't know the difference with this song. Keep it up, you're blazing a new trail in music and it's great to hear how it's progressing.

Thank you for your kind feedback, Bob.

I have no problem at all if you find problematic wording. I really appreciate any feedback because a) I'm not a native speaker and b) I still consider myself a beginner at writing song lyrics.

I guess "but can't remember" and "hero on white horse" are a bit incomplete, but whatever you find, I would be happy to learn from you (and everyone else).

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