Hi Ray,

You are a very busy chap! Whenever I am on the forum I see you are having a new song, a new version or a new try out.
Very energetic.
And here I listened to both your versions and while the majority is in favor of the second version, I prefer the first version.
I heard more nicedetails in the instrument handling there. I didn't hear much of the harmony in the 2nd version, that's a pity.
But in both songs I had the feeling the instruments/band played too soft. No real pronouncation in any of them, like a riff, or whatever. Only the solo guitar at 0.40. But what I found more alarming was that you were hiding your vocals again behind that (soft volumed) band. Why???

The melody itself is very nice, so nothing wrong on that. But MORE volume please!

Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130