Hi Scott,
This is great! The backstory really helped, and very descriptive writing.
Love the "Little [*****], get out of my car" hook
Also really liked the way you did the "Get out of my car" parts.
The Wrecking Crew did a great job for you overall I think.
I like the change for the "Goose stepping parents" part, works for me.
Really well done, listened a couple of times.
Damn! Going to have that hook stuck in my head all day now I think