I loved that story put to music. I thought the writing, particularly that first verse, was terrific. I agree that it may need some editing to make all the syllables fit in some places. I really appreciate you putting this song out there. My Great-grandfather fought in that war, my Grandfather in WWII, and the tradition has continued through our family all the way to my kids so far. Is that a photo of your Grandfather that you posted with the song?

https://soundcloud.com/user-722422510/tracks