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Nice trick making it simpler at the end, rather than more complicated. Quite unexpected, and effective.

I wish the vocal were a bit plainer. When the singing first starts it seems drowned in effects and processing. A tip I learned years ago: "If you can hear an effect, its too much."

I am listening for a lyrical or musical hook and not catching it.

The words "together" and "forever" is one of the most overused rhymes in the history of songwriting.


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