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Howdy everyone….

Ken and I have just finished a new collaboration. (thanks Ken) On the title….I thought I could flesh out something strictly from my imagination. I couldn’t do it to my satisfaction. Hence….I had to reference an experience by someone I know pretty well. Ken described it perfectly, it’s "a cautionary tale".
I'd guess some here could relate. Thanks to any that stop by and give a listen…..hope you found it worthy of your time.

_TBLZSEV.STY SlowBlues, VintagePno 12-8[85RS]
piano playing a 12-8 groove. Other RealTracks include 2 El.Guitar, El.Bass and RealDrums play BluesRockSlow. (El.Bass, El.Piano, El.Guitar, El.Guitar, Drums=BluesRock128^6-HiHat,Ride)
I didn't play my tele at all.
BIAB: Drums/Bass/keys/rhythm guitar RIGHT
Rhythm guitar LEFT & lead guitar: Ken Lasaine.


https://soundcloud.com/chulaivet1966/tracks (first song on the list)
Video option:
https://www.youtube.com/@chulaivet/videos (first song on the list)

Verse1: Young and restless, it’s time to move on. A broken family, I’m done with it all. Like the loner with little to say. I’ll catch you later, maybe someday. It might be crazy, but I have a plan. “Well come on in son and raise your right hand.” I had my reasons and the time was right. I made my reservation and said my good byes'.
Chorus: If you’re looking for a desperate escape, I have a suggestion. Be careful what you wish for it might be dangerous lesson.
Verse 2: It won’t be easy and it won’t be safe. What I was chasing was a double edged blade. It will be risky and no guarantees. If you jump in the river, better flow with the stream. Where it takes me, I don’t have a clue. If you want to be a man you have a whole lot to prove. Pay close attention and follow the rules. Don’t expect to have a room with a view.
Chorus: If you’re looking for a desperate escape, I have a suggestion. Be careful what you wish for it might be dangerous lesson.
Lead break:
Verse 3: Standard issue. Just follow the rest. What lies ahead could be anyone’s guess. I wanted some action, here’s what he said: “We got you covered”….they gave me a vest. Approaching the gangway to choppers on deck. My load is heavy and I’m breaking a sweat. I climbed aboard with a knot in my gut. It’s my last operation, will I run out of luck?
Chorus: If you’re looking for a desperate escape, I have a suggestion. Be careful what you wish for it might be a dangerous lesson.
Verse 1 (repeat 2 lines only): Young and restless, it’s time to move on. A broken family, I’m done with it all. Like the loner with little to say. I’ll catch you later, maybe someday.
Bridge:
Out: Abm// Copyright: Wayne Evans – Music & Lyrics 9/5/22

Wayne,

This a slick sounding blues/rock track! Great vocal and the supplementary tracks added on guitar are super! This has been put together in excellent fashion! Enjoyed it!

Take care, T

Howdy Torrey....

Many thanks for taking the time to spin it and the very kind words.
Don't tell anyone but this song is personal so I was a bit apprehensive about uploading it.
But....sometimes, we just have to throw our efforts against the forum wall and hope our peers find them worthy.

Thanks again amigo....hope all is well.

Joe Bonamassa type of blues song with great groove, catchy melody, excellent guitar playing and good vocals. Lyrically has many nice lines like "If you jump in the river, better flow with the stream", the verse 3 is really standout.

Janne

I like your song, especially the lyrics and how you deliver them.
The arrangement is good, the mix is solid but a bit restrained, could have a bit more bottom end.

PS: I watched the video and at the end it says in the copyright notice "Sept. 22, 2023". Do you guys have a time machine?

Howdy gents....

Janne.....
We thank your for giving a listen and the kind comments.
We appreciate it.
I enjoyed writing it but it is a personal song and I had mixed feelings about uploading it.

B.D.....
Oh jeez....I'm an idiot....it's embarrassing.
Thanks for catching it.
Can't change that now without deleting, editing and re-uploading.
Guess my blatant oversight will be there for another year for any listeners to shake their head at.
Thanks much for listening and your perception about the mix.
It's all appreciated.

Thanks again to you both for checking it out and commenting.

Good mix, good arrangement and a good vocal.
Interesting narrative - the experience/recruitment model that keeps the US military afloat.
I thought the song could've used a dynamic change..mainly tempo...for the standard issue verse.
Cool.

G'day mate....

Thank you sir for giving it a spin and commenting favorably.

Yep....an unfavorable home life leads to BIG life decisions at a young age.
I have no regrets.

I don't know ray....a 'tempo' change in just one verse could really take a away from the prevailing groove & pensive mood of the song as a whole.
But...what do I know!....I have been wrong in the past.

We appreciate your take on it and chiming in.

i like the bounce of this.
v nice lyrics.

nice doubled vocs/hooks and choruses mate.

i can see this being played in eg a line dancing bar or club.

hah ! loved that gtr note at the end. clever.

have a fantastic 2023.

om

Wayne, you and Ron came up with another beauty. A cautionary tale for sure, and so well said in those lyrics. I love the feel of this fun song. Some outstanding guitars in there, and the vocal is a good bluesy sound. Good choice on the electric piano. A great idea for a song, and an excellent production.

Howdy justanoldmuso....

Yeah...Ken is fine axe player and I feel quite fortunate to have his contributions.
I'm very pleased you found it worthy of your time.
Good luck to your with your music endeavors for 2023.

Howdy Marty....
Guess my vocal passed the loudness test in the mix on this one.
It was a interesting topic to consider but I struggled at first.
Out of pure stubbornness, once I got on the lyric train I finished it in a couple of days.

Ken and I thank you both sincerely for taking the time to spin it.
It's much appreciated when one's peers chime in and comment favorably.

A great weekend to all....

Wow. This is cinematic.

It is a familiar sounding story (from Bud’s life perspective) and you’ve painted a vivid picture here.

Great vocals and guitars. Love the solo.
The groove (a bit of a swing/shuffle hybrid to our ears) is really good and makes you feel the adventure.

Nice mix with the performances and BiaB - sounds like a well honed band.

Kudos!

J&B

Excellent work some great playing.

In my headphones the guitar solo is a bit soft - could come up a bit (not sure I'm someone to say that given I get that a lot!)

Nice work all round.

Peter

Well good mornin' J&B....

Bud...I know, you're an old fossil too and glad you can relate.
I'm pleased the imagery is there....that's always been my lyrical focus.
Of course, weather I succeed at that or not isn't determined by me.
I frequently refer to my 'adventure' as a 13 month picnic.
Absolutely!....the back up band is stellar.

Howdy Peter....
We appreciate you giving a listen and the kind comments.
Considering the talent you all bring to the forum it means a lot when peers approve of our efforts.

Thank you both very much for taking the time to listen and comment favorably.

Have a great day everyone....

I think the lyrics are really good and delivered well. Some very good guitar throughout and the mix is super! Excellent work, Tom

Howdy Tom....

We thank you for giving it a listen.
Glad you found it worthy and thanks for the kind words.
Much appreciated.

Have a good one....

Oh ya! This is fantastic.
Love that groove!
Super vocal and lyrics.
Outstanding guitar leads and mix.

This should be on the radio today!

Hi Wayne and Ken,

I enjoyed this song very much - good lyrics and catchy beat.

Only a couple of minor suggestions - I would love to hear your vocals in the verses 1Db high and the guitar solo 2Db higher.
Harmony Vocals in the chorus .5Db higher.

You are singing well so why not feature the vocals and lyrics.

Best Regards
Nigel

Reveille! Good mornin' all....

Howdy Mario....
Thanks very much for checking it out and the very generous comments.
When shuffling around for the right 'style' as soon as I heard it I know that was it.
Then a quick CONTROL/S before I get lost in my search.

Howdy Nigel....
I thank you also for giving it a spin, the kind comments and your specific perceptions of the mix.
All comments are welcome.
Should I revisit the mix I'll have your notes to refer to.

Thanks again to you both for your time.

Have a great day....

Yeah! Great groove happening with this one.

Good write and vocal, and Ken did a fine job on guitar.

Enjoyed!