I'd offer it started too soon. well, not enough intro to get my head around where things might go.
"First day of deer season, one in the sights
The day the love of your life smiled and said “I do”."
That's either laughing out loud fun writing or backblocks woodshed weird.

GREAT voice, and every moving part meshes with the machine like synchro.
Well done.


Cheers
rayc
"What's so funny about peace, love & understanding?" - N.Lowe