Hello everyone,

I made in a song in 2019, but I wasn't so goo in mixing and that sort of stuff.
Then, a month ago I received a 'like' on this song, so i listened to it. Awful, too much reverb and other mistakes. So I did a remake, because I liked the melody and the topic.
But I changed it far more than just the reverb. I thought the lyrics weren't good enough, the song needed another key, another tempo and then the sax didn't fit in it anymore (much to my regret). So I used a guitar instead.

About the song: A loved one is dying beside me and I wrestled with the phenomenon of Faith. Always a difficult matter. Think of what happens now in Syria and Turkey. How does faith works overthere...?

I hope you recognize what I'm singing about, but anyway, let me know what you think of it.
The title Forlorn is how you feel, when this happens.
FORLORN https://on.soundcloud.com/uhfR7

Hans

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Forlorn
(c) HWBerkhout, april 2019 / changed 2023, jan.

V
Can I find words to make you feel at ease?
Is there a place that gives you peace?
I hear you whisper, so fragile and weak
And I tenderly kiss you on your cheek
V
Is there a song you love to hear?
And will it take away your fear?
I feel your sobbing for what you foresee
Life has no mercy, you'll soon leave me
Chorus
How come I have lost my faith?
Why couldn't Life make time wait?
Are we just tourists? We never stay
Only memories, you always say
V
Is there a time we will meet again?
I hope you smile if you see me then
But now I can't see you moving nor hear your voice
And I know it's all over, Life made his choice
C
Solo
B
When we buried you
down by that river
My dreams, my soul, so torn
Oh, I stood there, all forlorn...
C
Outro
Only memories...
You always say
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Technical stuff:

Style is _HOWCOME.STY (How Come Mountain Fiddle Folk)

RealTracks in style: 1825:Bass, Electric, PopModernGrooveHeld Ev16 075
RealTracks in song: 3156:Fiddle, 5-string, Rhythm AmericanaMountain16thsPizzAndy ev16 070
RealTracks in song: 3185:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm Mountain16thsQuinn Ev16 070
RealTracks in song: ~1676:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking CountryBrent Ev 065
RealTracks in song: 3113:Guitar, Nylon, Fingerpicking Folk16thsBrent Ev16 060
RealTracks in song: ~1638:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm JazzFunkBreezyMuted Ev16 075
RealDrums in style:NashTrainEv16^3-a:Brushes , b:Brushes 16th
1836 Guitar, Electric, Soloist PopModernGrooveGritty Ev16 075 (Bluesy)
Keyboard in Logic, glass keys

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130