Hi there, Ezekiel, David and Floyd,

Nice to read that you listened to this sad song and still stayed positive ;-)

Originally Posted By: Ezekiel's Storm
The mix sounds really good on your remake, along with the instrumentation. You found the right key. Your voice sounds good on this. Poignant lyrics. I particularly like the lyric "Are we just tourists? We never stay."


Hi Ezekiel, I went through the whole alphabet of keys. I when I thought it could sound nice, I decided to try another key, even another tempo and the sadest thing was I had to change the sax for a lead guitar. But in the end I was satisfied with the result. And a bit sad singing that topic so much.
I heard or read a story years ago where that line about the tourists was used. Very different from how I used it in the song, but I liked it. It's just as it is!
The original version of Forlorn is also on my SoundCloud, but it's better you don't listen to that one...

Originally Posted By: dcuny
Good mix, interesting arrangement, good vocals. I like the "choral" sound.
The lead guitar sounded a bit "out" of the mix, otherwise the mix balance is good.
Nice write, too. I like this a lot! laugh


Hi Dave, thanks for your comment and observations. The bg-singers were a mix of my vocals, Melodyne, a plugin called Howarsd Benson vocal multiplier and Waves Harmony. I used them on several tracks, thinking all the time it was al too much.Don't think I'll do this again, but it was alright here.
At first I was impressed with what you said about the lead guitar. I had shifted that track a bit to get that final slam just in time for the quiet part. I thought "how could you have noticed that"? Then I read your post again and saw you meant you didn't like that guitar overthere...
Well, me too at first. I had a sax, but that didn't fit with the changing of the tempo.

Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Hans,

A thoughtful, powerful write.
Very well sung.
Excellent tracks. Cool sound.
The drop is really well done. Effective.
The chorus harmonies are well done.
Excellent mix.

A great re-do!
fj


Hi Floyd, thanks for this nice compliment. It was based on a mix of real situations in that time. And, although I can speak very easily about all sorts of issues, I noticed in these situations my head was filled with all kinds of thoughts, but I couldn't say much. That is when I thought of writing a song about those feelings and things as 'faith'.


Thanks for listening and have a creative day!
Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130