Nice work.
Solid band and interesting narrative.
"'neath" can be done well but in this context the rest of the narrative writing style doesn't chime with it so it sticks out as an oddity.
The parochial references are lost on me, though helped by the image, which means I've likely missed some of the magic.


Cheers
rayc
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