Ray,
Pretty cool stuff! A very good start. Good drive, composition, vocals(!), phrasing, bass all good. Mix balance of all instruments is fine but..

Dave said it better than I would about the lead guitar. So I +1 on his comment. What distracts me the most is that metallic bell sound ringing that is present throughout the tune. The "after touch" tail, not the "hit". I hope I am describing it clearly. In any case, good effort. Thank you for sharing.

Misha.