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Good day all.... I'm not one that writes quirky, humorous songs so this is my first effort. Once I got started the lyrics came somewhat easily. I'd guess we've all had "One Of Those Days".  BIAB is bass/drums Ken Lasaine on all guitars https://www.soundclick.com/artist/default.cfm?bandID=897733https://soundcloud.com/chulaivet1966/one-of-those-days-ken-lasaine-on-guitarsThanks to anyone who stops by and wants to hear about someone else's bay day. Hope you find it worthy of you time. Verse 1: Another early morning with a yawn and a stretch. If I knew what was coming, I’d have stayed in my bed. I stubbed my toe and now it’s all black & blue. I spilled my coffee, all over my shoes. Stumble through the kitchen to let the dog out. There’s my toast on the floor and it’s butter side down. Thought I’d treat myself to brews and a steak, but there’s a flat tire staring me in the face. Chorus: It’s one of those days when nothing goes right. I think I’ll play it safe and stay home for the night. It could be paranoia and it’s all in my mind. Still, I scrubbed my vacation and cancelled my flight. Verse 2: Out to check the mail and see what’s waiting for me. I’m reaching inside and got stung by a bee. The wind was howling when I heard that sound. The door slammed shut and I locked myself out. I had a bad feeling, it’s starting to rain. Every window’s locked tight, guess I’m to blame. I called my brother ‘cause he’s got a key. His message said that he’ll be back in a week. Chorus: (4) Bar intro: to lead break Bm/ A/ G// Lead break: verse music + chorus music Bm/ A/ G// (4X) F#m7/ B/ F#m7/ B G/ A/ B// Verse 3: I hear my neighbor Jonesy is laughing out loud. He said he saw me shake my fist at the clouds. That’s how it goes. It’s all in a day. Time for me to choose which window to break. Chorus to end: © Wayne Evans: music & lyrics Feb 29, 2023
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Man this was an enjoyable listen, especially when I realized my day went a whole lot better ! Great vocal and great guitar work by ken. Anybody tell you that Huey Lewis (and the News) stole your style? And tell Jonsey to help fix the window 
https://soundcloud.com/user-646279677BiaB 2024 Windows For me there’s no better place in the band than to have one leg in the harmony world and the other in the percussive. Thank you Paul Tutmarc and Leo Fender.
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Mornin' BT.... I got a good laugh out of your comments. Got it....I'll get "Jonsey" to help fix my window. I figured the song topic would be ubiquitous and most could relate to experiencing one of those days.Ha...on the "Huey Lewis" comment. Thank you very much for giving a listen and the kind words....much appreciated. Have a great weekend everyone....
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Whew, it's good to know I'm not the only one who's had days like this! I'm glad you ventured into this style of writing, you did a great job. I liked so many lines in this, and began laughing out loud when that toast hit the ground - butter side down. I wouldn't have thought of that, very clever. You did a great job with your vocal making the song sound so relatable - and fantastic guitar work all the way through. Fun song!
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Cool lyrics :>}
Made me smile and tap my toes all the way through it.
I like the guitar leads and the chord changes too.
Nice job!
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It's a fun tune with some great guitar tones.
I was hankering for more "perfect" rhymes though.
It's an unusual step to reduce the arrangement for the chorus but it works well - except for the last line "Still, I scrubbed my vacation and cancelled my flight." which seems both rushed and fighting the guitar for dominance.
Well done both of you.
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rayc
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Good song. You've got a great guitar player backing you up. Looked at his web site, impressive stuff.
Nice work.
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Howdy Brad.... Ha... no...you're not the only one. He had a bad day. It was a 'venture'...I almost didn't finish this one for upload thinking it may not stick to the wall. Ken disagreed so I soldiered on to wrap it up in spite of my confidence issue with this one. Howdy Elliott.... It was a different write for me but I guess it's good for one to get out of ones comfort zone occasionally. Yep...I'm fortunate to have an accomplished axe player that thought enough of my material to contribute. Maybe I did something right over the years. G'day mate.... I've written many songs where the rhymes far are more 'perfect'. But, I think close rhymes are just fine which makes the lyrics less common, less predictable yet still lyrical to the ear. Close rhymes are frequently less cliche and require much deeper thought for them to work. In hindsight I could have used: "So I scrubbed my vacation....". That damn 'hindsight' thing likes to rear its head. Gentlemen....(figure of speech ) I thank you all for taking the time to listen along with all the generous comments. It's truly appreciated coming from our peers. Have a great day!
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Yea, we have had one of those days before! “They” say that misery loves company, right? We almost felt guilty for tapping our feet and smiling as we listened. You and Ken are a great team and we always enjoy your productions. Great mix that sets up a most enjoyable soundstage on our monitors. We think you nailed the “quirky, humorous” bit for this song! J&B PS A friend pointed out to us some of the accomplishments of Ken. Very impressive!
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Well howdy J&B (they named a Scotch after you! :)) Ha....yes, "misery does love company". "Tapping our toes" to someone else's bad day always seems acceptable. I'm glad to have 'nailed' the quirky, humorous genre but it will probably be my last for a while. I have a new one on my plate which is more my normal fair. (BTW....I'm trying to get "Jonesy" to help me with my window replacement since he mocked my behavior towards the clouds but he's not answering his phone (?). Maybe he's out picking us up a sixer of Heineken. Or, went on vacation) Thanks so much for giving it a spin and all the kind words....much appreciated. Have a great day.... EDIT: I spoke with Ken today and he thinks he knows the person you may be referring to. I'm unable to PM you Feel free to PM if you like.)
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Well, I cannot relate to the story... except shaking my fist at the clouds, every day or if there are no clouds then at the wind Funny lyrics, made me smile, compassionately. Nice light rocking rhythm, good guitars and vocals. BTW. Have you read about Buttered cat paradox? Janne
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Wayne & Ken
Very cool tune. Super lyrics! A+ performance. I am don't know if you followed some suggestions or not, but first thing that came to mind, you figured out vocal levels! Perfect balance. The only critical comment on vocals is, they dive in a little on choruses and it feels it is not the "loudness" but EQ thing. Ken is wonderful guitarist. I really like his playing. I wish PG would record a few RTs with him. Enjoyed it and thank you for sharing.
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Howdy Misha.... I'll check out your observation on the chorus vox. If someone here has made an observation about a song I'll always revisit it to see if we agree. But....with countless system configurations and different ears mixing can become a real rabbit hole. Mornin' Janne.... Ha....no....haven't heard about the Buttered Cat Paradox. I'll check out the link you provided. Glad you 'can't' relate to the story....I wouldn't wish it on anyone. Thanks very much to you both for giving a listen, the kind comments and thoughtful observation. Have a great weekend!
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This is so SO GOOD, Wayne. Man, you definitely should do more of these humorous songs. I'm all alone here and actually laughing out loud. Man, excellent guitar work from Ken, too. I wanted to pick out a line or two to quote, but the whole package is just perfect. And launched it in the best melody. Really liked it all.
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Well good mornin' Marty.... Ha..."more humorous songs". Hmmmm4....that means I'd really have to create a "Much Worse Day" scenario title for the next one. Once I got started on the lyrical stream of consciousness the lyrics came quicker/easier for some reason. Those are very generous comments and are very much appreciated. Thanks much for giving it a listen and very kind comments. Have a great everyone....
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Hi chulaivet1966
The little everyday problems are well written in your lyrics. I love the perfect symbiosis between your voice and the solo guitar. It's well done.
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Derochette
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Well howdy J&B (they named a Scotch after you! :)) Ha....yes, "misery does love company". "Tapping our toes" to someone else's bad day always seems acceptable. I'm glad to have 'nailed' the quirky, humorous genre but it will probably be my last for a while. I have a new one on my plate which is more my normal fair. (BTW....I'm trying to get "Jonesy" to help me with my window replacement since he mocked my behavior towards the clouds but he's not answering his phone (?). Maybe he's out picking us up a sixer of Heineken. Or, went on vacation) Thanks so much for giving it a spin and all the kind words....much appreciated. Have a great day.... EDIT: I spoke with Ken today and he thinks he knows the person you may be referring to. I'm unable to PM you Feel free to PM if you like.) Howdy, if you google his name as listed in your post you get a list of sources for a guitar player of that name who is of renown ... so I assumed it was him. Right or wrong we enjoyed the playing! J&B PS You can contact us via our website ... we don't use the personal message option here.
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Howdy J&B....
Thanks for response and clarifying contact info.
AND for the listen.
Have a great day....
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It is quite obvious that you were spying on me when you wrote those lyrics  Super fun song. You ought to right more like this one. Outstanding vocal and guitar chops...Great work Ken! Super mix. Outrageously funny song!
My goal this weekend is to move just enough each day so that no one pokes me to see if I'm dead or not.
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Howdy Derro.... Thanks very much for checking it out and the generous comments. My first less than serious write. Those 'every day problems' can be brutal for the unsuspecting. Howdy Mario.... Ha....I'm sorry, it was pretty sneaky 0f me to 'spy' on you but when you were 'shaking your fist at the clouds' I couldn't resist not telling your story. Thanks for the kind comments and we're glad you found it worthy. Thanks again gents....
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