Yeah the 1st two syllables stick out as does the seemingly very precise diction.
Most of the larger intervals sound a little suss. It has a classical singer doing country feel to it.
The vocal is strident - some EQ to soften it would help it sit a little.
Yeah the solo tone is not a keeper in my book either. It something I struggle with in BIAB...that & that I really don't seem to like Brent Mason's stuff - and there's so much of him.


Cheers
rayc
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