"The age of entitlement,
Eclipsed the age of enlightenment.
The ageing conspiracy
Eclipsed the grasp of history."

Nice.

A good write. Changes to that 4th line (chorus) are really nicely done.

Backing sounds good. Holds together.
I like your vocals. They work. (almost loud enough).
My ear kept wanting some kind of pad-ding - through much of it. Strings? (there are a couple of nice snippets) or Organ? BIG Strings could be a dramatic addition...
The quartet bit is a nice touch.

Well along on this.

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