Hi, James.

Sounds good!

But I can relate to the feeling that you're writing the same song over and over again. wink

Some thoughts you can ignore...

I heard you almost sing on "with golden hair". So I know you can sing a little. And a little is all you need.

How about just singing the chorus? And by "chorus", I means something really simple, like repeating "You don't know" or "You broke my heart". Not many words, only a few notes.

Make the chorus more up-tempo than the verse, so it's a strong contrast with the verse. Drums, shakers - all the standard tricks that pop songs use to give the chorus a lift.

You could even mix the sung part with spoken word in a call and response, such as:

   (sung) My one mistake... (spoken) Not telling you.
   (sung) My one mistake... (spoken) What can I do?
   (sung) My one mistake... (spoken) That's my one mistake.

That way, you're only singing a few notes - but making them count!

I've mentioned William Shatner's "Has Been" album, which has the "problem" that he doesn't sing. For example:

That's Me Trying

And if you don't feel comfortable singing, you can do what Shatner did and have someone else sing it for you. laugh

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?