Originally Posted By: floyd jane
"The age of entitlement,
Eclipsed the age of enlightenment.
The ageing conspiracy
Eclipsed the grasp of history."
Nice.
A good write. Changes to that 4th line (chorus) are really nicely done.
Backing sounds good. Holds together.
I like your vocals. They work. (almost loud enough).
My ear kept wanting some kind of pad-ding - through much of it. Strings? (there are a couple of nice snippets) or Organ? BIG Strings could be a dramatic addition...
The quartet bit is a nice touch.
Well along on this.
fj
fj

Ta Floyd,
The 4th chorus changes came to me very early and I had to remember them...hard at my age.
I did have some padding in the mix but it sounded crowded, a little claustrophobic even - which sort of fitted the narrative but the difference without it was, to my ears, leaner.


Cheers
rayc
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