Originally Posted By: B.D.Thomas
The lyrics are good, and the song is interesting enough to keep me listening until the end.
My only complaint is that _everything_ sounds restrained, there is no leading instrument/vocal to give the song a direction, to take me by the hand and lead my way.
(I hope my explanation makes sense)

Thanks B.D.,
The vocal, as explained in the O.P., is a draft and of very poor technical quality so is quiet.The lead instrument - the trem guitar of the intro/solo/outro is fairly solid at this point.
It is a "restrained" song though...there's no canter or gallop let alone race to the end. In this instance the song dictated the pace as it developed.


Cheers
rayc
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