Originally Posted By: rayc
The vocal has an odd nasal, vaguely flat sound on some syllables like O'Riordan from the Cranberries.
Imagine having to say that a synth voice is sibilant - but it is a bit.
Musically this builds as it goes along but it does seem to reach peak intensity a little early.
I can hear and understand why the bass chugs a lot but it does it quite a bit.
The hold at about 2.10 isn't as convincing as the one at 2.02.
Really tidy band arrangement and you've programmed a cool melody, (though the hook gets hammered quite a bit - ear worm in the making I suppose).
I can imagine this working well at Hillsong Sydney.


I always appreciate the detail you provide on your critiques. The holds.... maybe... I didn't actually think the first one was a hold and the second one is a reverse audio that really didn't work as well as I wanted. Maybe too short.

As always, thanks for your feedback.

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