That is a classic story. Cool that you turned it into a song.

This is well done. Nice work on the instruments. The mix is solid and sounds smooth.

The only nit I have is that the vocal doesn't sound like it's in the same room with the band. The choice of reverb is the issue. You have 2 different sonic environments going on there. Fix that and this is top quality stuff.

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Add nothing that adds nothing to the music.
You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.