Cool song. I like the idea. Since you're a songwriter .... I'll say this......

Some of the lines are about a girl, others are about grilling some venison.... the only issue I see is the continuity or disconnect, between the two different things.

It's not quite to the "man that was brilliant" stage. It's at the great idea, now lets get it polished up stage.

In the first verse you pretty much set the scene, but that chorus and second verse.... kinda like Hannibal Lector plays country music.... It was kinda creepy sounding..... maybe that's just me seeing it the wrong way but, hey... it put a smile on my face but I'm known for some dry, sick humor at times.

Good tune, I just think it needs more work....

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