Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Alan,

Really nice. A good write. It's a well-worn song idea that you've brought a "freshness" to.
Very sincere.
You sing it like you mean it.

Nothing wrong with those two lines you mentioned. At all.
If you want a slight change, you might try
"Been near everywhere
Seen near everything"
That gives it a bit more "local" (TN) sound. Gives you more of a "match pair" and it allows you to give it a little more SING since it dropped a syllable or two (always more important than it might seem...)

But, bottom line... I like it!!!

fj



Thanks a lot, Floyd. I like your suggestion for replacement lines for the two I mentioned. If I can recreate this in BIAB, I might redo it.

You might recall that this is the song that you heard me sing on that other site and suggested I bring it over here.

As always, I appreciate, and hold in high regard, your comments and suggestions. Wishing you everything good ...

Alan

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