Dewey,

A strong write (one of the strongest I've heard from you). Lots of "clever". Good alliteration (a tool that many never think to use).
An appropriate backing. An appropriate vocal - they fit the song.
Back when these type songs were being recorded, this one coulda had legs. ('70's or early '80's?... been a while)
A good job on this.


(a quick note - you sent me a PM. I responded about a week later - I was away for a while. Anyway... you have not read the response - there is a notification at the bottom of the PM, is how I know. I'm assuming that that means you are not seeing the little red flashing icon next to "My Stuff"...that means you have a PM waiting.
Just an FYI)

fj