Cool. I'm not familiar with this Dylan song.

I listened with focus to the refrains after seeing Ray's comments. So what I hear is the bass doesn't resolve to the proper place in a timely manner on REALIZE in the first refrain. Everything else in there sounds fairly good on the first refrain. However, in the second refrain.... your vocal melody clashes with the chords and goes off the rails at.... You're gonna make me... which is the halfway point in the second refrain.

Shouldn't both of the refrains be the same melody wise and chord wise?

You need to work out a fix for the refrains.


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