Ray (and Alison)
Neat, dark and deep composition. I like lyrics / word play on this. Intense stuff. Seems Alison picked up mood very well. I briefly listened to original and gave good spins on "sparkle" and "no horns". I think vocals are a bit muddy, even on very "bright" headset (I tried 2). My hearing is not that good, but it seems to me it's not the frequency "fight", but EQing of actual vocals that suffers. They ask for more clarity. A complete opposite is the guitar parts from 2:44-3:12. It seems way too bright and too "natural", which makes it stand out significantly, compared to the rest of arrangement. Perhaps that is how you intended. I didn't read what others suggested. These are my opinions. Regardless, it seems you are almost there smile Thank you for sharing,
Misha.

P.S. I was working on a tune recently and mix was driving me cuckoo, I ended up killing most of FX and started fresh. In about an hour I had better results than in prior 4 smile Not suggesting an overhaul, just sharing my experience.