Hi Bass Thumper,

I listened to your funky song that was developed in such a strange way, as you described.
Funny story by the way.
The song has very nice elements, but also some that are a bit monotonous, starting half way.
The sax and trumpet were very nice and did their best to lift the song, but I fear it wasn't enough.
I was thinking of what could have caused that feeling I had.
Of course the absence of singing mattered a lot, but also your bass guitar (now it's getting tricky for me, I fear).
I think you need to play a more interesting bass line then what you did.
And last but not least, I think some drum fills can also help.

Altogether, not a bad song at all, but it could do with some improvements to make it more interesting/dynamic.

Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130