Originally Posted by dcuny
Hi, Noel.

Nice write and melody - I enjoyed the song!

I think the vocal works well. I find that Kevin is a bit... flat when he sings. Not in terms of pitch, but energy. The female voices don't seem to have quite that same problem, and I don't know if I've got any good work-arounds. I posted a few ideas on the SynthV forum.

I'm not a fan of using words like "shall" when the other lyrics are less formal - it feels tonally off to me. Then again, lyrics and music are a heightened language anyway, so... whatever works for you.

As cliche as it is, perhaps a key change would bring some lift that Kevin's voice doesn't. Then again, there's really nothing fundamentally wrong here, so feel free to ignore the suggestion!

Nice work! laugh
Hi David,

It's always a pleasure to hear from you.

Thank you so much for all the information you posted on the Synth V forum. That has helped me understand the mechanics of the software a whole heap more smile I'm sincerely grateful. It's been fun playing around with Kevin.

Interestingly, from what you say about "shall", I suspect that it's used differently in Britain than it is in the US.

These days in Australia, we are equally influenced by both Britain and the US. While I was growing up, though, the British influence dominated. Although "shall" has gradually become replaced with "will", in my English lessons at school, I learnt that "I/we shall" is merely a statement of fact about doing something in the future. "I/we will", on the other hand, contains the notion of a promise or a commitment to doing something in the future. In second/third person, "You/he/she/they shall (do something)" was a command and "You/he/she/they will" was a statement of fact about doing some future act. When the contraction «'ll» is used, most people think it is solely "will" but it is equally representative of "shall". You might be interested in the article below. It sheds a little bit of light on this.

https://www.usingenglish.com/articles/using-shall-in-british-english.html

Thanks for the tip about keys. I didn't play around with keys when I was putting this together. I simply kept it in the key that I would have sung it in. I should have been more adventurous! That's definitely something I'll keep in mind in the future.

Thank you very much for all your help so far.
--Noel


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