Brian, (I guess that is your name???)

I think you watched the wrong video.

Floyd was saying that the song should be in the key of G with a maximum of four chords, and should focus on an egocentric but heroic male character who drives all beautiful women crazy so they leave him and then beg him to come back to him because they miss his greatness, but he says he is too busy for them now and writes a Band-in-the-Song about them as punishment.

The song you wrote is more in line with the lessons provided here:



You should be thinking:

Tight silver spandex pants
An over-inflated Codpiece
a Trapeze Act
A five minute synth solo
hair implants
Groupies
Gratuitous Sex
The Max Martin secret hit song recipe*
* If you do not know what that is please stop writing songs

However, I think you are getting very close, and your wife should be pleased that you are very close to being the Eurovision winner of 2024.

Good job old bean.