Originally Posted by vicarn
Nicely written, Fred.
I think the chorus lacks a bit of oomph as the song has the same rhythm all through. Try turning up the backing vocal there.
Perhaps it needs a held electric guitar chord there too.
Maybe it won't work but it's worth a try as it's a good song.

Vic

Thanks for your suggestions, Vic. This is just the kind of feedback from this forum that is helpful. I will work on the chorus.

Fred


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