Originally Posted by floyd jane
Dan,

A very strong write. You know what you are doing.
And very strong vocals. Another strength. Beautiful harmonies.
Really nice piano. You strike me as a "real" piano player. Like you've done it all your life and I imagine you able to sit at a piano and "just be impressive". It always amazes me how few piano guys are out there - we're mostly guitar guys (and WHERE are all the piano girls?). Mostly, I'm jealous - having wanted to play piano for a very long time.

The first verse really drew me in. The production there is really nice. Beautiful.

But you lost me in the choruses. They strike me as "overproduced". The underlying musical track seems to have so much going on that there is no definition. It's a "big mass of music", difficult to determine what might make it up.
There is a "pulsing" from the combination of instruments and many voices. Everyone seems to pounce on the beat.
I listened first on speakers and then listened again on earbuds (which allowed a bit more "identification", but not completely).
You are truly talented in ALL aspect of "what we do" - writing, recording, arranging, production, singing. This is the first time I've heard something from you that I felt "needed work".
Then, again, I might be losing it completely and everyone else will negate all of this.
These ears get older every day. And I have a cold.

fj
Floyd....thank you SO MUCH for your comments...over the years here at the forum I've learned ( listening to your mixes) to trust your comments...thank you for taking the time to listen with a critical ear to this song...I've spent hours trying to get this mix right (whatever that is?) knowing that mixing is subjective...I wanted this song to be BIG and powerful and I wanted a "wall of sound" around the vocals but after your thoughts and the comments of other trusted forum members I can see that I had build the wall too thick...so I've posted a remix with a few adjustments...1. I brought the pad (distorted synth, strings, etc,) down in the overall mix...2. I took a lot of effects off of the vocals and raised them in the mix...3. I automated the vocal tracks so that they would increase when the dynamics and volume of the track increased in an attempt to keep them on top of the mix...4. I tweaked some other tracks and automated some of them too...I can hear the difference...thanks to you and all the other guys who made such comments...I believe it helped enhance the song...Dan

Last edited by firesong; 11/03/23 09:48 AM.
www.soundclick.com/firesong
BiaB 2024, Steinberg Cubase Pro 13, Wavelab 11.2, SpetraLayers Pro 10, Audacity, Steinberg UR44 Interface, Yamaha Genos, Roland FP60 and FP10, Windows 10

You are who you are because you do what you do because of what you believe.