Hi DJ and Christian.

This is brilliant!!! I love the funky groove and the infectious 'feeling great' rhythmical accompaniment pattern. In addition, the arrangement is awesome! It's inventive and it sits perfectly with the vocals.
DJ, you sound really fantastic. I love that ABABXBCC rhyme scheme in the 8-line sections. It creates an excellent lyric flow, and I really love the finish of the perfect-rhyme couplet at the end of each of these sections. To be honest, I don't think there is a better way of making a lyric-flow equivalent of a period (we call them 'full stops' here in Australia) than a rhyming couplet. I also really liked the use of spondee meter with "jump ball". Most of the other lyrics have syllables that alternate between weak and strong but the ultimate lyric phrase, and the song's hook, consists of two stressed syllables side by side. That's top shelf kind of writing!

Hmmm... I'd describe this as "fantastic on vitamin tablets". It's that good.

All the best,
--Noel


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