Hi Vic

Originally Posted by vicarn
Hello Hans.
Welcome back.
I like your song.
It must be difficult writing a song in a language different to what you are used to.
Do you write it originally in your own language and then translate it to English?
I'm asking because some of the lines seem a little awkward and mechanical, though they are understandable.
Your production is good to my ears although I would reduce some of the effects.

All in all, a good song.

Vic

Thanks for your reply. And to dive into the main issue, no I don't write my songs in Dutch first (only Dutch songs of course).
I sometimes check sentences or lines on certain words, or the way you write them.
You noticed some awkward and mechanical use of my English.
I can think of one line in particular ("In the middle of a night sleep I'll find") where you might say it is a bit awkward.
But I did that deliberately. And I always try to avoid 'mechanical' use of words.
So I invite you to show me 'the errors' you noticed. I can learn from that.
Thanks Vic,

Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130