Hello Joe,

What a funny song! I love such an original angle!
And you have a very pleasant voice too!

Some thoughts about the mixing and singing of the song and the lyrics:
Maybe turning down the db of the drums is a good idea. They sometimes 'overwhelm' the vocals.

The way you sing is good. Nice vocals and they sound bright.
But I noticed that at the end of almost every sentence your voice ends 'down'. Try ending it upwards some of the time.
This can help making the song even more engaging.
Also let your background vocals sing that line 'Beta fish' less or softer. You can't be heard properly
-Finally, as David Cunny wrote, take a look again at the lyrics. A lot of words!
People have to listen very carefully not to miss any.
I always have a fight with my lyrics too. I want to say/sing a lot, but less is best I learned/ am still learning...

I hope these notes are of any help for you,

Hans


Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130