Hi David,

I skipped some commentators to answer you first. Otherwise it would stay in my head forever...
And Ron, Bob, Dave, Marty and BD, I come back to you. So, don't get mad at me.
First I must answer you, David:

Originally Posted by dcuny
Hi, Hans.

Nice idea, and well executed. There are a number of phrases that sound a bit "off" in English, but they work fine.
My only comment is really about the end - it doesn't quite fit for me. The line in the verse:

   If you see me, you must change it
implies there's time, but it then jumps right to:

   So I think you got it now
   I've lost,
   I've lost

I understand the point, but I'd expected something along the lines of "Well, I guess this must be what people want paradise to be." wink

Nice work on the video, but it's a bit too literal for my taste. But that's just me. smile

At first, thanks a lot for your comment, your thoughts and thorough research on the lyrics.
I agree that there was a 'bit off word' in the first chorus ('to live a happy life'). I said 'and' instead of 'a'.
I noticed it after publication and decided to leave it in. If you've heard more odd words, let me know.

About that line "if you see me, you have to change it" you wrote from there, I drew that conclusion he has lost.
But I don't think that's the case.
If you take a look at the structure of the lyrics you see that from that first chorus, God becomes more and more frustrated with what is happening with or by his creations ("not the goals of mine")
He tried to receive hopeful signals from humanity, but received nothing. Instead, he noticed that no one is doing anything and that things are actually getting worse...
As a result, he comes to the conclusion that, with all his wonderful plans and intentions for the Earth and humanity, he has lost it.
That is that bridge you said you were missing.

And as for the video: it was my first, although it still has to be done well. I do think that it is always a matter of taste how you make songs, videos, etc.
Since the song is about something delicate (religion), I thought I would make this video in literal steps to avoid sensitive mistakes.
Although I am not religious at all, I am pretending in this song that there is a God (!), but that he is certainly not happy with what he sees. I wouldn't be either...

Very nice days ahead and thanks again,
Hans

Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130