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Sorrow, Longing and Depressive Nights

This track can be described as "A lament of grumpy old men in a nursing home called Who Cares". Original Finnish version was written 5 years ago, at that time I thought the song should be funky blues, but when I started to work on the English version with Synthesizer V vocalists, I immediately noticed that they require a more straightforward rock version. So I re-arranged it and here is the result. Just having fun with synth voices and great selection of rock instrument in BIAB. I hope you don't mind another depressing song from my vaults smile

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Tetanus vaccine gave protection as a child
didn't help when I was bullied in the playground wild
my teachers didn't care about the poorest of the pile.
No tuberculosis, but depression filled my mind
kicked out of Google, the cat died, hope declined
nights were comfortless in spite of
the anesthesia of a wine.

Sorrow, longing and depressive nights
why couldn't doctors vaccinate against those blights
hey nurse, could you give me a remedy
a needle to my butt and out of misery
life was meager, inattentive
I prayed for sweeter days to come
I got only crumbs.

For a very short while I danced with Martha Lee
but she fell for a guitarist, Riley from Tennessee
my heart was not immune to it, I got sick of chronic grief.
I knew though she was that kind of girl who breaks her toys
after few banging will change her lover boy
still I couldn't fight the longing
a virus from the shards of joy.

Sorrow, longing ...

Sky's like a painting of my life
I look out at the grief in grey
when the discourteous nurses
change my diapers once a day.
No faith in heavenly gladness
but in the void without a concern
sink this soul into oblivion of no return.

Sorrow, longing and depressive nights
why couldn't doctors vaccinate against those blights
hey nurse, could you give a consolation prize
won't clear the memories cutting like a knife
but it calms down, it's a healer
for the rest of my life
the rest of my life.
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Janne, this is very good.
I liked the groove and backing tracks.
I thought there are a few sections where the synth voices sounded rushed. Maybe a few less words would help?
Otherwise this is a very good song that I liked.


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Hi Janne,
You have quite an imagination when it comes to song ideas!
Very clever write as usual, and yeah, somewhat depressing but mostly fun. Love the line about Riley from Tennessee wink
I get what Mario is saying about the lead vocal, he does seem to struggle in places.
Good song, enjoyed.
Cool ending!

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Janne,

Sounds great. Very clever lyrics and another good use of SynthV.

Much enjoyed!

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Very cinematic and a lot of fun for a song featuring "sorrow, longing and depressive nights". Like your use of the guitar soloist for some occasional color during the song and more stretched out for the outro. The vocals are quite nice overall, some of the best vocaloid work I've heard. Agree there may be a line or two where a syllable or two less would help with the naturalness of the delivery.

Quite creative lyrically. Great job!


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Originally Posted by MarioD
Janne, this is very good.
I liked the groove and backing tracks.
I thought there are a few sections where the synth voices sounded rushed. Maybe a few less words would help?
Otherwise this is a very good song that I liked.

Thanks Mario for your positive review smile You are right, some parts are rushed. I worked hard to get that "virus" part sound more natural, but it seems that I failed. Thanks for the great advice, less words would certainly help, I have already idea for the verses. But if you mean the bridge part, then it is more tough one, because the melody needs to have that many notes...

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Your song is a bit strange lyrically, but I like it, maybe because I'm not yet the target group for your lyrics smile

As others have already said, the lyrics are a bit hectic in places.
I'll pass on some good advice Scott (Ezekiel's Storm) gave me after I posted my first or second song here: try to say the same but with less words. Best (lyrical) advice ever!


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Hi, Janne.

I see others have given helpful advice. So I can just say... that was not what I expected. laugh

Although with a title like that,what would one expect?

It seemed like all your vocalists got in on the singing action.

Thanks for the explanation, or I'd be really puzzled by this lyric:

   when the discourteous nurses
   change my diapers once a day.


Interesting song!


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Yeow, that title made me hope for the sequel called Smiling Happiness and Cheerful Days. Man, these lyrics are super good. Funny and true for the grumpy ones. Man, you really know how to shape those synth vocals, and translating is a whole nuther hurdle that you have cleared with ease (or so it sounds). I kinda like the rushed lyrics. Cool solo, too. The whole band kills it (as the kids say); it's slay, man. Much fun at the expense of the grumps. Enjoyed thoroughly, Janne. This is the end.


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Hey Janne,

If there's one thing I can say about you, you know how to write a happy, really danceable rock and roll song with plenty of good laughs.

With all this great Rock and Roll music man what's not to love, and the parts about being depressed made me laugh out loud.

If this is what being depressed feels like put me in coach!!

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Originally Posted by BlueAttitude
Hi Janne,
You have quite an imagination when it comes to song ideas!
Very clever write as usual, and yeah, somewhat depressing but mostly fun. Love the line about Riley from Tennessee wink
I get what Mario is saying about the lead vocal, he does seem to struggle in places.
Good song, enjoyed.
Cool ending!

Thanks Dave for your pleasant review smile Glad you like my strange imagination wink Not every song has to be a standard love/breakup song laugh And sometimes I leave some easter eggs for those that like to dig deeper into my lyrics, so I'm very glad you noticed Riley wink Nothing to do with the real persons of course, maybe this old guy is just hallucinating...

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Originally Posted by rsdean
Janne,

Sounds great. Very clever lyrics and another good use of SynthV.

Much enjoyed!

Bob

Thanks Bob, I appreciate your positive comment smile

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Originally Posted by DC Ron
Very cinematic and a lot of fun for a song featuring "sorrow, longing and depressive nights". Like your use of the guitar soloist for some occasional color during the song and more stretched out for the outro. The vocals are quite nice overall, some of the best vocaloid work I've heard. Agree there may be a line or two where a syllable or two less would help with the naturalness of the delivery.

Quite creative lyrically. Great job!

Thanks DC for your kind feedback smile Glad you liked that guitar, BIAB has very good selection of soloists nowadays. Nice that you mentioned cinematic, I wish I had time to make a video for the song, I have some ideas and AI generated images already, it could have a more comical approach.

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Well, the depressing parts are helped by your humor considerably!
These lines made us think of discussions we both had with family and friends in the local “home.”

“Sorrow, longing and depressive nights
why couldn't doctors vaccinate against those blights”

We like the variety in the Synth V vocalists and your rock band idea was a great one for this subject matter.

Now we need a prequel for the “early years!” 😊

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Originally Posted by B.D.Thomas
Your song is a bit strange lyrically, but I like it, maybe because I'm not yet the target group for your lyrics smile

As others have already said, the lyrics are a bit hectic in places.
I'll pass on some good advice Scott (Ezekiel's Storm) gave me after I posted my first or second song here: try to say the same but with less words. Best (lyrical) advice ever!

Thanks B.D. for your kind comment smile I can live with that you are not yet the target group laugh

Well, good advice by Scott, although it wouldn't help if I take it literally: I would use less words but longer ones with more syllables wink

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Originally Posted by dcuny
I see others have given helpful advice. So I can just say... that was not what I expected. laugh

Although with a title like that,what would one expect?

It seemed like all your vocalists got in on the singing action.

Thanks for the explanation, or I'd be really puzzled by this lyric:

   when the discourteous nurses
   change my diapers once a day.


Interesting song!

Thanks David for your nice comment smile Glad to give you something unexpected wink

I was thinking about giving each vocalist a whole verse/bridge, but that would have been too variable, so I settled for Kevin on the lead.

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Originally Posted by BabuMusic
Yeow, that title made me hope for the sequel called Smiling Happiness and Cheerful Days. Man, these lyrics are super good. Funny and true for the grumpy ones. Man, you really know how to shape those synth vocals, and translating is a whole nuther hurdle that you have cleared with ease (or so it sounds). I kinda like the rushed lyrics. Cool solo, too. The whole band kills it (as the kids say); it's slay, man. Much fun at the expense of the grumps. Enjoyed thoroughly, Janne. This is the end.

Thanks Marty for your fun comment and enjoying my grumpy tune smile And thanks very much for the title for the sequel, let's see if that ever comes true, I'm a master in translating even cheerful titles into sad stories laugh

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Great music arrangement and mix, but lyrically too down for me.


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Wow this is excellent. The SynthV work is exceptional very human sounding. Singing difficult melody lines. The music fits the odd nature of the lyrics. This is almost a like a Rock Opera. Impressive


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Very original sound with the melody and instrumentation. Dark tone, but tempered with some humorous lines (at least in English), such as "hey nurse, could you give me a remedy/ a needle to my butt and out of misery" and "hey nurse, could you give me a remedy/ a needle to my butt and out of misery."

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