I love those internal rhymes, something I also explored in my last song, and am starting to understand how cool they can be.
Nice story, great vocals and a REALLY good mix.
And the ending is a really cool idea.
The choruses sound to me more like a pre-chorus and I was waiting for a chorus with a bit more oomph or something.
But since I seem to be the only one who feels that way, it's probably just me and nothing to worry about.
Enjoyed the listen a lot anyway
