Originally Posted by firesong
Dewey...one of the cleverest songs of the year! this is country radio ready! the lyric (story) lays perfectly in the laid back groove of this number...super vocals (as usual) and a great backing track...cool song!

Dan, you are always so encouraging! Thank you for your kind words, my friend in Christ!

Originally Posted by NigelSpiers
Hi Dewey,

I enjoyed this very much.

Good song, good lyrics, great beat and well sung.

Minor suggestion: How about an instrumental solo to give it a touch more light and shade. I'm sure there are plenty of quality twangy Guitar soloists in the BIAB Real Tracks.

Excellent work.

Best Regards
Nigel

Thanks for listening, Nigel, and the suggestion! I rarely add solos to my productions (bluegrass is the exception) for pitching purposes. Dewey

Originally Posted by David Snyder
Hi Dewey,


Ok, if you're serious about wanting feedback I'll take a stab at this.

The portmanteau didn't bother me one bit but I think it could be implemented differently.

To give the song some really strong verse-chorus variation, I would stretch that part out, even the words tropi-caaaaaaaallllllllllll me...blah blah blah

I mean reeeaaaaally drag that out.

I actually think it could be a crowd pleaser too but with a different style.

The fact that you're singing about a tropical subject is crying out for more of a Jimmy Buffett type arrangement instead of Billy Ray Cyrus, that was the disconnect for me not the title or the lyrics.

I think if you had a more of a Jimmy Buffett type approach that was laid back and easy and less Billy Ray Cyrus it would be more comfortable and easy to get into, and then if you got into a chorus where tropi-caaaaall me (woo-hooo!) was really stretched out there might actually be a market for it because it could be a country or trop rock radio song. Troprock is really big right now actually, and this would work in that genre but that particular style you're using is kind of dated.

Also I assume that tropi-call was the username of the person on the dating site and so when you sing it you're making a reference back to her, and it's not a portmanteau per se, you're actually referencing her ID on the website.

So if that were done in a more Jimmy Buffett style I think that it would make people laugh and you could have some traction with this one.

Those are my thoughts since you asked it for serious feedback.

David, as a member of NSAI, you know I'm serious about getting honest feedback - both constructive and good. Based on the feedback from several folks (within and outside of this forum), I plan to pitch this one as-is for now (except for a one-word addition and line switch in the chorus that someone suggested to me). I initially searched for a trop rock style as you suggested but they all seemed to take away from the message - ironically, steel drums and reggae feel was a bad fit to my ears.

Regarding the id of the subject the username is not "Tropi-call" me and you're the first one to suggest it was confusing so, pending further feedback, I think I'll keep it as-is for now.

Thanks for listening and taking the time to give a thorough review!

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