Hello Folks,
It's been a couple of months since I posted Judith Said - the song with a SUPERB vocal by Janice Merritt.
I've a few things I'm working on but only one that's in a state for any sort of listening.
This is a song I wrote with my college writing partner Eric Drabwell, formerly of small town near Shreveport - but we did this about eight years ago rather than back in '76.
It sat unfinished because it had potential but plodded along with insufficient variation for me to feel comfortable with it.
I used BIAB to recreate the original song then added some chords changes to give some variation.
Originally this was all G and C but I added a D/Dsus and an Am plus a C to give it some movement.
I used the drums, piano, organ & lead guitar from BIAB and recorded the rhythm guitars & bass myself.
I copied the original vocal into the project and did some tuning to have the vocals agree with the news chords as well as a fair but of slicing & dicing to get the timing & phrasing right.
Eric's not fussed on the changes and dislikes having his vocals tuned but I needed to do that nasty thing to make the changes work. His essential melody remains, pretty much, untrammeled though.
I'll add the chords, BIAB components & lyrics presently, (I'm cooking dinner as I'm doing this).

Here's an update with a different solo guitar. I explained the problem in my response to Mr Snyder.
UPDATE#1

For the moment here's the unmastered current mix:
APPARENTLY - The Newlings
BIAB STUFF:
Organ - 671
Solo - 1260
Drums - RockHardLA^7
I can't find the piano file...sorry...too many changes to the basic SGU.

LYRIC:
(Eric added the NO and some variations to the You don't part)
For those in the know this is based on the very famous lyric by a cloth capped English chap doing introspection amidst the glam world. I used to rewrite famous lyrics as an exercise and to absorb forms etc. This one seemed to work better than most.
Not so very long from now
A few minutes or maybe an hour
I’ve arranged by stealth to help myself
To take residence in the tower
And once because I’m soft will send my tears aloft
All that just to make it plain to you
That what we had you’ve completely shattered
Left standing in a daze you amaze
As you were saying:
"It’s all a lie I will not try"
No point in you refraining
From tearing down my life
And landing me in strife

You don't love me?
Apparently,
No.

It could have been any day
For you to chose to go away
But it’s not for you that wouldn’t do
Demise to be its own decay
So to make it all come down
You brought the world around
Once with so much,
Now it's cut by your touch
Displayed me in little pieces
Leaving them no doubt
All about your lack of mercy
You took your grand exit
And took it without me
No, there was no need
But you knew I’d plead

You've walked again?
Apparently,
No.

It seems to be
That there are more lives
Wasted in the world
That you have rended
They can’t be mended

Why do you do that which you do?

If I consider the years
The shouting and the tears
I recall you cried when I said you’d lied
Not knowing you hid your fears
And of all the lies you told
Not one was oh so bold
As the things you said beside me in bed

You don’t love me, apparently, no.
You’ve found someone, apparently, oh.
You’ve walked again, apparently, oh.

You don't love me?
Apparently no.

Last edited by rayc; 05/20/24 06:32 PM.
Cheers
rayc
"What's so funny about peace, love & understanding?" - N.Lowe