DCuny took the words out of my mouth. Focus on the "correct" syntax of the words as used commonly in speech and the pronunciation of the words by the synths. Take the time to listen to the song and the singers, and focus on the areas where you think to yourself... that's not natural. People wouldn't emphasize that syllable in the word in normal speech.

I often spend a lot of time on that sort of thing. And that word LIVE.... spelled the same way with two different pronunciations. When this happens, I will input the word phonetically and experiment to get it right.

All in all, this shows you spent a lot of time with the voices to get those harmonies. Nicely done.

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You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.