David,

It's a wonderful write and terrific arrangement. In that regard, I like the build . . . starting simple and just adding along the way, which adds so much gravity to the tune as it moves on. From a production standpoint, I think the vocal is a bit too far out in front . . . I'd like it just a bit softer. Though that's an artistic preference . . . as always, go with what feels right to you.

Deej