Great concept, well thought out song construction and some nice chord work. The only nit pick I would have ( and you asked for suggestions LOL) is that I felt it was too "wordy", and by that I mean I wanted to hear all the lyrics but found myself having to read them after a time, they were so dense. If you compacted the verse and left a little more room for the music to back you up with dynamics I would have enjoyed it a little more. That being said, songwriting is an art form. If it was easy everyone could do it. You my friend...are a songwriter.

Rick


It needs more cowbell!

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